Lord_of_the_Sea's character

Half-Bloods
Name:Will Treaty
Age/Birthday:19 July 15 1948
Gender:Male
God Parent: Apollo
Claimed: Yes
Mortal Family:Deceased
Years in Camp:3
Brief History: Got stuck in the lotus hotel and casino at at age 15. Add, Adhd and Dyslexic. Being fostered in California. Is spoiled rotten by his RICH foster dad who is a son of Ares.
Physical Appearance:4'11". Green eyes Black hair. Blessed by Apollo to hit every target. Has a green ,gray cloak with a deep cowl.
Personality:Don't piss him off. Split personality (Janus). Doesn't like school. Hates bullies.
Fatal Flaw:Personal Loyalty
Pets:German Sepherd
Talents: Expert archer. Can nocth, aim and fire in UNDER 5 seconds.
Weapons:Bow and 2 quivers
Year-Round

You realize we can trace your IP address here, correct? I know this is being posted from the same computer as one of our other member's "lordofthedead". You have the same IP address as him and this character is quite similar to one of the ones he created and your name is also quite similar.
We do not enjoy double accounts on CHB. Please PM an admin and explain ASAP. Otherwise, we are going to assume you double accounted (which, by the way, is against the rules) and delete both "lordofthedead" and "Lord_of_the_Sea".

Half-Bloods
Name:Will Treaty
Age/Birthday:19 July 15 1992
Gender:Male
God Parent: Apollo
Claimed: Yes
Mortal Family: Missing
Years in Camp:3
Brief History: Born in Canada.Adhd. Being fostered in California. Is spoiled rotten by his RICH foster dad.
Physical Appearance:4'11". Green eyes Black hair. Blessed by Apollo to hit every target. Has a green ,gray cloak with a deep cowl.
Personality:Don't piss him off. Split personality (Janus). Doesn't like school. Hates bullies.
Fatal Flaw:Personal Loyalty
Pets:German Sepherd
Talents: Expert archer. Can nocth, aim and fire in UNDER 5 seconds.
Weapons:Bow and 2 quivers
Year-Round

Half-Bloods
Name:Will Treaty
Age/Birthday:19 July 15 1992
Gender:Male
God Parent: Apollo
Claimed: Yes
Mortal Family:Missing
Years in Camp:3
Brief History: Born in Canada. Adhd. Being fostered in California. Is spoiled rotten by his RICH foster dad.
Physical Appearance:4'11". Green eyes Black hair. Blessed by Apollo to hit every target. Has a green ,gray cloak with a deep cowl.
Personality:Hard to piss off. Hates mean kids.Doesn't like school. Hates bullies.
Fatal Flaw: Holding Grudges
Pets:German Sepherd
Talents:Can nocth, aim and fire in UNDER 5 seconds.
Weapons:Bow and 2 quivers
Year-Round

Subject: Re: Lord_of_the_Sea's character Today at 9:01 am

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Half-Bloods
Name:Will Treaty
Age/Birthday:19 July 15 1992
Gender:Male
God Parent: Apollo
Claimed: Yes
Mortal Family:Missing
Years in Camp:3
Brief History: Born in Canada. Adhd. Being fostered in California. Is spoiled rotten by his RICH foster dad.
Physical Appearance:4'11". Pale Yellow eyes ,Dirty Blonde. Blessed by Apollo to hit every target. Has a green ,gray cloak with a deep cowl.
Personality:Hard to piss off. Hates mean kids. Doesn't like school. Hates bullies.
Fatal Flaw: Holding Grudges
Pets:German Sepherd
Talents:Can nocth, aim and fire in UNDER 5 seconds.
Weapons:Bow and 2 quivers
Year-Round
Other: Has a driver's license

Please accept Administrators!

Lordofthedead is my BROTHER and we LIVE in the same house.

First of all,

You copied that character from Ranger's Apprentice in both name, history, parentage, and personality

Second of all you're not even close to accurate on the amount of information you need for an acceptable character

Third of all don't double post, or in your case would it be quadruple posting?

Subject: Re: Lord_of_the_Sea's character Today at 9:15 am

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Subject: Re: Lord_of_the_Sea's character Today at 9:01 am

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Half-Bloods
Name:David Hammerling
Age/Birthday:19 July 15 1992
Gender:Male
God Parent: Apollo
Claimed: Yes
Mortal Family:Missing
Years in Camp:3
Brief History: Born in Canada. Adhd. Being fostered in California. Is spoiled rotten by his RICH foster dad.
Physical Appearance:4'11". Pale Yellow eyes ,Dirty Blonde. Blessed by Apollo to hit almost every target. May not look like he's strong but he can throw you 2-3 feet.
Personality:Hard to piss off. Hates mean kids. Doesn't like school. Hates bullies.
Fatal Flaw: Holding Grudges
Pets:German Sepherd
Talents:takes him 6 seconds to nocth aim then fire .
Weapons:Bow and quiver.
Year-Round
Other: Has a driver's license

Simply changing the name of the character is not going to cut it. His personality and other traits are still copied from another work of fiction, and they are not detailed enough anyway. You need to actually read the forum rules.

Here's the first link you should read:

https://camphalfblood.forummotion.com/t4201-rules-of-the-forum-must-read

Second:

https://camphalfblood.forummotion.com/t3096-mary-gary-stus-must-read

Here's the third link you'll need:

https://camphalfblood.forummotion.com/t4202-character-templates-and-information-must-read

And read this one when you're all done:

https://camphalfblood.forummotion.com/t3085-how-to-roleplay-must-read



Please, please, please look at other member's characters for ideas! I would recommend staff characters, though members have excellent characters, too. Here's my character link:
https://camphalfblood.forummotion.com/t5026-nico-s-special-friends
You can use it for an example. I hope this helped!

Half-Bloods
Name:David hammerling
Age/Birthday:18 July 15 1992
Gender:Male
God Parent: Nemisis
Claimed: Yes
Mortal Family:living with grandparents.
Years in Camp:3
Brief History: Born in Canada. Adhd. Being fostered in California. Is spoiled rotten by his RICH foster dad.
Physical Appearance:5'6". Pale Yellow eyes ,Dirty Blonde(Dad's hair). Doesn't look strong BUT he is. Built for heavy lifting.
Personality:Cruel and vicious. Likes rock music. Plays video games in his spare time. Cares
for his German Sheperd.
Fatal Flaw: Holding Grudges
Pets:German Sepherd
Talents:Swordplay.
Weapons:Twin Katanas(comes from an ipod nano Rotate click wheel twice)
Year-Round
Other: Has a driver's license

Okay listen, Lord_of_the_Sea....
While your character does have "4 sentences" of sorts in all required areas. They are HARDLY considered sentences.
A sentence consists of a few general things:
A subject, a verb etc. etc.
For example:
ADHD is NOT a complete sentence.
Full sentence:
David has a severe case of ADHD, like most half-bloods.

That is a complete sentence. And that is what we expect you to do. Not just put a period after one word and call it a sentence...

Born in Canada=Not a sentence
ADHD=Not a sentence
Being fostered in California=Not. A. Sentence!

You get my point. Please edit your character and please, if you need help or inspiration or an idea of what your character should look like, look at some of the currently accepted characters. There are tons of great ones out there. And you can PM a staff member if you need help, we'd be happy to assist in any way we can.

Half-Bloods
Name:David hammerling
Age/Birthday:18 July 15 1992
Gender:Male
God Parent: Nemisis
Claimed: Yes
Mortal Family:He is living with grandparents.
Years in Camp:3
Brief History: He was born in Canada. He isAdhd. He is being fostered in California. He is spoiled rotten by his RICH foster dad.
Physical Appearance:5'6". Pale Yellow eyes ,Dirty Blonde(Dad's hair). Doesn't look strong BUT he is. Built for heavy lifting.
Personality:Cruel and vicious. Likes rock music. Plays video games in his spare time. Cares
for his German Sheperd.
Fatal Flaw: Holding Grudges
Pets:German Sepherd
Talents:Swordplay.
Weapons:Twin Katanas(comes from an ipod nano Rotate click wheel twice)
Year-Round
Other: Has a driver's license

He's Accepted.

Jeez....almost all of your characters are rich...

Kingofthesea's character

Half-Bloods
Name: Eragon Gray
Age/Birthday:18 June 9 1993
Gender:Male
God Parent:Ares
Claimed: Yes
Mortal Family: Elisa Gray (Mom) Jon Deka (StepDad) Jane Deka (StepSister) Katrina Deka (StepSister).
Years in Camp:9
Brief History: He ran away from home but he's always welcome back. He was captured by Luke Castellen and was forced to join the titan army. A few years later he ran away for them and made his way to camp half blood. He's dated 4 girls.
Physical Appearance: He's 6 feet tall. He has brown hair and Green eyes. He's very muscular. When he's angry his eye's flare.
Personality:He is ADD. He's rude to guys not girls. He really hates allies dying. He detests the Titans. He gets angry pretty quickly.
Fatal Flaw: Hubris
Pets:None
Talents: Swordplay and Archery.
Weapons:Broad sword, Quaterstaff, Bow and 1 Quiver (The Quiver contains 90 plus arrows).
Summer
Other: He owns a MITSUBISHI Lancer (Mom's old car).


Admins take a look at this charrie

Whoa, he needs way more info.

What is he missing selene?

I think that she means he needs a little more detail. o u o

Half-Bloods
Name: Eragon Gray
Age/Birthday:18 June 9 1993
Gender:Male
God Parent:Ares
Claimed: Yes
Mortal Family: Elisa Gray (Mom) Jon Deka (Step Dad deceased cancer 1999) Jane Deka (Step Sister) Katrina Deka (Step Sister).
Years in Camp:9
Brief History: He was born in London England. He flew over to Canada in 2001 with his family. He plays hockey in his spare that isn't filled with video games and Youtube. He ran away from home but he's always welcome back. He was captured by Luke Castellen and was forced to join the titan army. A few years later he ran away for them and made his way to camp half blood. He's dated 4 girls.
Physical Appearance: He's 6 feet tall. He has brown hair and Green eyes. He's very muscular. When he's angry his eye's flare.
Personality:He is ADD. He's rude to guys not girls. He really hates allies dying. He detests the Titans. He gets angry pretty quickly.
Fatal Flaw: Hubris
Pets:None
Talents: Swordplay and Archery.
Weapons:Broad sword, Quaterstaff, Bow and 1 Quiver (The Quiver contains 90 plus arrows)xcalibur hockey stick that turns into a cavalry sword.
Summer
Other: He owns a MITSUBISHI Lancer (Mom's old car).

I don't see much revision done to his character other than his history. Please add more detail and elaborate on your sentences for all of his sections and let me or another admin/mod when you're done.

Half-Bloods
Name: Eragon Gray
Age/Birthday:18 June 9 1993
Gender:Male
God Parent:Ares
Claimed: Yes
Mortal Family: Elisa Gray (Mom) Jon Deka (Step Dad deceased cancer 1999) Jane Deka (Step Sister) Katrina Deka (Step Sister).
Years in Camp:9
Brief History: He was born in London England. He flew over to Canada in 2001 with his family. He plays hockey in his spare that isn't filled with video games and Youtube. He ran away from home but he's always welcome back. He was captured by Luke Castellen and was forced to join the titan army. A few years later he ran away for them and made his way to camp half blood. He's dated 4 girls.
Physical Appearance: He's 5'10". He has brown hair and Green eyes. He's very muscular. When he's angry his eye's flare like they're on fire(almost like his dad's.
Personality:He is ADD. He's rude to guys not girls. He really hates allies dying. He detests the Titans. He gets angry pretty quickly.
Fatal Flaw: Hubris
Pets:None
Talents: Swordplay and Archery.
Weapons:Broad sword, Quaterstaff, Bow and 1 Quiver (The Quiver contains 90 plus arrows)xcalibur hockey stick that turns into a cavalry sword.
Summer
Other: He owns a red MITSUBISHI Lancer (Mom's old car). He also has a driver's lisence.Plus he has a Border Collie Named Rex

Can you put his pet in the pet section so it's easier? o w o Also, can you add some more details to his personality, I don't see how the personality has changed, and it definitely needs more details. -u-