|The lightning thief|
Posts : 3
Join date : 2012-03-31
Age : 16
Location : Right Behind you
|Subject: The Lightning Thief's character Sat Mar 31, 2012 6:24 am|| |
[color=red]Name: Grace McDermott
Age/Birthday: 12 my birthday's the 1st of april (2000)
God Parent: Hermes
Mortal Family: Mary McDermott (mom) Anne McDermott (granmother)
Years in Camp: 1
Brief History: I don't know much about myself. My mom never spoke about my dad, no pictures. All she said was that I have the same features and attitude. We moved houses every year. My gran says she never seen my dad but my mom said he was the man of her dreams. Then dad claimed me. My mom said that he was Hermes, god of thieves and travellers. After that day I just woke up 2 years later (that's what the date in the papers said at least) and found my way to camp half blood.
Physical Appearance: I bear the hermes family resemblence. upturned eyebrows, a sarcastic smile and a gleam in my eyes, and freckles. I have brown hair with streaks of blond running through it. I have brown eyes .When I smile my mom always knows something is going to missing.
Personality: I'm cool under pressure. I'm always pulling jokes. I'll help anyone as long as they need it but I can also get them into deeper trouble. I can be cocky at times.
[color=red]Fatal Flaw: What I think I can do independently always seems to get me close to death.
Pets: I used to have a cat called Driger
Talents: Cool. Good Swordfighter. Thief. I could go on forever but I just don't feel like it
Weapons: 2 and 1/2 ft celestial bronze sword I call Graecus
Year-Round or Summer: Year round
Last edited by The lightning thief on Sun Apr 29, 2012 3:44 am; edited 2 times in total
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Posts : 119
Join date : 2012-03-30
Age : 102
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|Subject: Re: The Lightning Thief's character Sat Mar 31, 2012 9:51 am|| |
Welcome to CHB, lightning thief!
I love how you started off with your character's physical appearance. Yes, they all share that sarcastic smile, don't they? But maybe you can expound more on "Athletic". You can say "My muscles are relatively well-toned because I'm athletic." or something like that. Also, try adding just a tad bit more detail; "I have brown hair" or "I share the same green-colored eyes as...."
You get the gist. :)
Other than that, you've got a nice character! See you around!