Justin's Characters (one needs to be accepted)

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thank you Bacon :)

How does that Apollo/Chaos parentage thing work out exactly? Elaborate on that. When you have a character like this with a lot of stuff going on in their past, you need to explain a bunch of things like how they got to a certain place, what happened, why, and etc. But, you didn't explain those things. There's quite a few holes in this character.

But one of my main questions is, is she still immortal?

Also, her ages don't line up. In 1853, she was born. In 1858, at the age of 5, she runs away to camp. In 1863, five years later, she leaves camp. Then she becomes immortal for a century, which leaves us at 1963, but you say she then turns 13. What? That's totally confusing. She wouldn't be thirteen, technically she'd be over a hundred years old. More like a hundred and ten. But, then she goes back to camp and right now, it's 2012. She'd be really old, okay? Her history just doesn't line up.

And, why would Chaos have an assasin? He's a promordial god.

Quote :

"Chaos (Greek χάος khaos) refers to the formless or void state preceding the creation of the universe or cosmos in the Greek creation myths, more specifically the initial "gap" created by the original separation of heaven and earth."

That's the research I did. So, Chaos's children were Nyx and bunch of other primordial gods and goddesses so any of his children would really just be the equivalent of, like, titans.

I honestly think you just need to redo this character and think it through more.

"I dont know, I can fix it though, but I got it from a story. does that part really matter?

It kind of all matters, your character doesn't make sense, Kylie.

xD I know that, ill work on it now. then can you look at it?

Hey, Just wanted to point something out- Justin can't drink. It's possible for him to drink a beer or two, (Legally) but someone that age would definitely not drink (plus I don't think that drinking is allowed at camp). Also, in his brief history, he doesn't have to go home to his parents. The camp is magical. They would never find him.

ok I understand that, I made that when I first joined, il fix it later. if I remeber

Sounds good. Just wanted to point that out.

thanks

Chaos does not have assasins. I'm jut saying. Chaos is just an it. I don't even get how we allow his 'kids'. Please change that part.

aww, I got the idea from a story but ok, what do I put? I want something to do wit chaos, can I make her a soldier of him or something?

Just make her a hunter of Artemis. Or make her a normal camper.