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selene
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 |  Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We)  Sun Apr 03, 2011 12:12 am | |
| Fluffy, I love it, it just creeps me out | |
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Remplissage
Golden Oldie
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Age : 29
Location : Standing in a shower of narcissism.
| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Sun Apr 03, 2011 12:16 am | |
| I may hate songfics, but I do think this is good. I like it, honestly. It actually made me frown in sadness. Not many things can do that. Great job, Fluff. | |
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Fate
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Join date : 2011-04-01
Location : Hillbilly Central, and it sucks.
| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Sun Apr 03, 2011 2:30 am | |
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tethys
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Sun Apr 03, 2011 6:21 pm | |
| Er, creepy, but well written . . . o.o | |
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Guest
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Mon Apr 04, 2011 11:25 am | |
| Aww, thankies, my lurvlies. 8D
Much appreciation.
EDEET:
It really warms my day to see these lovely reviews. You give me hope. |
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maddie ☹
Grammar Police
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Fri Apr 15, 2011 9:21 pm | |
| OH FLUF, IT'S SAD, YET AMAZING. Though, it repeats a paragraph. On purpose?
WILL THERE BE MORE? | |
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Guest
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Sat Apr 16, 2011 12:33 am | |
| This was a one-shot, but for the purpose of a songfic it repeats on purpose. |
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Guest
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Sat Apr 16, 2011 8:33 pm | |
| Looks awesome! I really felt the hurt when Collette was struck by her boyfriend. I found a few grammatical mistakes here and there, but they might have been intentional? I'm not sure. xD
I also didn't really understand this line,
- The Fluff Fear wrote:
- Those shades of blue on that face she always hide the smile beating beneath her chest.
Otherwise, it's a pretty sweet story! I am totally digging the layout as well. xD |
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Angel
The Puppet Master
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Age : 30
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Sat Apr 16, 2011 8:35 pm | |
| Very creepy O_o But an extremely well written and awesome story, Fluf ^^ | |
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Guest
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Sat Apr 16, 2011 8:38 pm | |
| - Crispy - It was a line in the song. 'Shades of blue' being her bruises on her face and the 'smile' meant she's still happy, smiley and strong. |
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Guest
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Sat Apr 16, 2011 8:39 pm | |
| Ohhh, I see. Alright then. xD |
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Zan
Mega Asshole Duo
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Age : 27
Location : butthole PA
| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Fri Apr 22, 2011 5:15 pm | |
| WHAT'S A SONGFIC? *frowns in confusion* I'm sorry. I'm stupid. xD | |
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Guest
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Fri Apr 22, 2011 5:58 pm | |
| A fictional story (usually a fanfiction) based on a song or its lyrics.
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Zan
Mega Asshole Duo
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Location : butthole PA
| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Fri Apr 22, 2011 6:01 pm | |
| OMGGG!! I kinda have one of those. It's Williamson, my Zeus character. Only Colby would get it though... I SHOULD WRITE ONE. | |
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hunter11
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Age : 26
Location : camp half blood duh
| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Sun Apr 24, 2011 1:36 pm | |
| Fluffy. I only have three words for you.
Please. Write. More! I absoulutly love it!!!!!!!! | |
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Guest
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Sun Apr 24, 2011 1:44 pm | |
| Aww, thanks, Hunter. I'll be sure to(: |
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Nico
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Mon Apr 25, 2011 9:23 pm | |
| YAY! AMAZING NEWS! SHE'LL WRITE MORE! | |
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Zan
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Thu Apr 28, 2011 11:47 am | |
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Guest
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Sat Jun 04, 2011 12:50 am | |
| In case, no one has checked in the past month or so, I have updated the story and put up a portion of chapter two (I've been lazy, spare me). Feedback is appreciated(: |
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maddie ☹
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Sat Jun 04, 2011 1:17 pm | |
| I love it, Floof. KEEP ON WRITING. Your writing is magnificent 8D | |
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Guest
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Sat Jun 04, 2011 3:14 pm | |
| UPDATE: Chapter two has been added. With a new character(: |
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Alexia
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Join date : 2010-04-09
| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Thu Jun 23, 2011 10:37 pm | |
| Soooooooooooooo good! Amazing actually. | |
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Guest
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Thu Jun 23, 2011 11:11 pm | |
| Oh, thanks. :DD That means a lot from you, Alexia. |
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Alexia
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| | Subject: Re: Too Beautiful | A Domestic Violence Songfic (He is We) Fri Jun 24, 2011 10:52 pm | |
| (: idk why but you're welcome! It's so sad and raw and true that it's beautiful. It's great to see untouched emotion come out in these characters. It's like they're part of you. | |
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