hyper9k's characters ( Maverick needs approving)

As the name suggest,these are my characters:

Half-Blood
Maverick Hyden
Age-18/May 5,1994
Male
God parent-Ares
Claimed-Yes
Human Family-Dead
5 years in camp
Brief History-Maverick was born in Iowa City,in a large village. When he was 5, he had moved to a more populated area, so he could go to school. For the first 6 years of going to school,he was a 'picture perfect' student, as the teachers called him, and would almost always help anyone who asked. Then, a little more then half way through 7th grade, his parents were killed in a car accident, leaving him to live with his aunt. He slipped into depression and let his grades slip, eventually dropping out of school all together. That summer his aunt took him to stay at a summer camp, and that day was the first time he ever stepped foot in the soil of Camp Half Blood.

Physical Appearance-Maverick is 6'2" and has red eyes. He has wild red hair,an average build,and lightly tanned skin. He wears a black,red and gold armored trench coat over his camp tee-shirt. Maverick has an X shaped scar on his right cheek and a tattoo of a dragon wrapped around a cross on his upper left bicep. He often wears dark green cargo shorts or grayish camouflage pants with a grey shirt when he wears casual clothes.

Personality- Maverick is brave and brash to a fault when he needs to be,often getting into fights to help others,and will not stand for people harming his friends and loved ones. When alone,he will often be reading a book or playing with his weapon sets. Maverick prefers to do his own thing and is often thought of as a leader for his headstrong attitude and tendency to jump into a battle and prevail, though because of his temper will seldom take the position.
Flaw-His temper
Talent-Sword skills
Weapon-Uses a Great Sword
Year-Round

The brief history, physical appearance and personality sections need a minimum of four full sentences, not just fragments. Just a heads up ^^

fixed. I had a limit on the # of characters I could use,so I can't really fit much in the box. I had to make the history,appearence and personality one whole section.

So get on a normal computer and fix it? Because this character isn't going to be accepted until the brief history, personality, and physical appearance have four complete sentences.

Alright,it will take some time 'till I can get on a normal computer,so I'll just have to wait untill then

fixed,I've gotten the character bio corrected and improved. Hope it's okay. :)

Don't forget to put spaces after your commas. His personality is kind of clashing, too. And I really wish you would use the templates found here. It is extremely hard for me to understand what part is what in your character's template.

I shall have it fixed by tomorrow afternoon, I hope.

Okay, thank you. He should probably be accepted by then, too.

fixed.

still waiting to be approved *sigh* this is so boring

Thank you! :)