Helen of Troy's Characters !

Half-Bloods
Name: Katie Scarlett O'Hara
Age/Birthday: 15 1/2 2/5/ 97
Gender: F
God Parent: Apollo
Claimed: No
Mortal Family: Ellen O'Hara ( Mother)
Years in Camp: 1
Brief History: Katie Scarlett left her home at the age of twelve after a terrible accident that left her 6 year old step brother dead. The young girl had been babysitting her brother and there had been someone inside the house, she had used her bow & arrows that her mother had told her to use in case of danger and she accidentally misfired and hit her brother in the stomach instead. Ever since then Katie Scarlett has dreaded facing the music and she is scared that somehow even though she is safe at camp that the authorities will catch her. She ran away, hiding in alleys and stowing away on cargo trains, She made it to Charlotte North Carolina where eventually the authorities caught up with her, she was taken to an orphanage because her stepmother no longer wanted her. She stayed at the orphanage for two years, but one night it was attacked by a monster and she was on the run again, she was then eventually rescued by a satyr and they made it to camp. To this day Katie Scarlett feels that she caused her little brothers death and is very cautious about who she trusts and what she does, she still feels like the police are breathing down her back.
Physical Appearance: Katie Scarlett has long black wavy hair that extends slightly just past her shoulders, just barely though. The daughter of Apollo has accented cheekbones and long eyelashes. She has a slight case of freckles over the bridge of her nose and piercing green eyes. She has a lean build and magnolia colored skin. She is somewhat tall standing at 5'8.
.Personality: Friendly, and flirty, a bit shy though, Katie Scarlett can be very strong-willed and ambitious. She hates being told what to do and she prefers being the one telling people what to do. Katie Scarlett takes a lot of pride in herself and she cares a great deal about her reputation and what people think about her. She sometimes feels alone in the world even though she knows that the camp is full of other people like her.
Fatal Flaw: Hubris - Extreme Pride
Pets: N/A
Talents:
Weapons: A celestial bronze dagger named Katoptris after the Cermonial dagger that Helen of Troy was given
Year-Round or Summer: Year round
Other:

While the content is quite fabulous, there exist a few things I'd like to tackle regarding this particular application.
I suggest that you edit your form a bit and fix your run-on sentences. Also, please follow proper capitalization and punctuation. Meaning, do your best to avoid a comma overuse.
Other than that, perhaps you could use alternatives for the pronoun 'she'? But that's just me-- and the choice is yours to make.
Good job on Scarlett.

Ok, thanks, I edited it