My first story:Needs a title

Okay it's pretty good, but you need to make a few corrections. Spaces after commas and periods and rung is supposed to be rang. If it was rung it wouuld be used in the context: I grabbed a wet dish cloth and rung the water out of it until it was damp. Periods are supposed to be before commas and quotations. You put: 'boring' .I went home and got some food,a sleeping bag,and all that stuff.I met on the corner with Kaitlyn and Duncan.
It's supposed to be:'boring.' I went home and got some food,a sleeping bag,and all that stuff.I met on the corner with Kaitlyn and Duncan.

Ok,thanks.I'll get to those right now.

I edited it to fix the mistakes :) Thanks for helping me out

This is a good start, but I'd like to make a few suggestions.

You should try starting off with a good topic sentence that draws the reader into your story. Remember Rick Riordan's first sentence in "The Lightning Thief"? "Look, I didn't want to be a half-blood." Doesn't that grab your attention? Second thing, I think you rushed into things way to fast. I would suggest adding a few things before they go into the house. Perhaps there is a soul following them but they don't know it. Make sense?

In other words, this is a good start. I hope you enjoy writing it! (:

First of all, try not to double post. Second of all, this paragraph (below) needs some help. I do like where you're going with this and the story line, though.

Quote :

Life can be boring. I know this because I am sitting in school right now, listening to my teacher go on about some old war. I wasam thinking about after schoolwhat I was doing after school. My friends Kaitlyn, Duncan, and I are meeting after school today to check out the old house on the corner. Some people say it wasis haunted SomeA couple of older kids dared us to stay the whole night. Some say it was haunted. I say there was something weird going on. (<<< I don't get that part) The bell finally rang, and I wasran outta there quicker then you could say "boring". I wasam walking home home, and once I gotget there, I gotget some food, a sleeping bag, and all that stuff. I metmeet on the corner with Kaitlyn and Duncan.

I'll go down the line with the issues with that paragraph.
1. You need a comma after now, because, you are saying where you are THEN what you are doing (which needs a pause).
2. This is the main problem. You started out with present tense, then you started going past tense. Since you started with present, I assumed you wanted it present tense, and I fixed that.
3. After school is too broad, so I changed it to "what I was doing after school".
4. You never introduced the people beforehand, so you need to tell us who they are by simply adding "my friends" in front of that part!
5. You gotta add "today" after it or else we don't know when!
6. The haunted part should come before the "a couple of older kids".
7. Some older kids needs to be changed because you just started a sentence with some!
8. That part confuses me. It seemed like a random statement.
9. Comma after rang, you are combining two sentences.
10. Overall, it seems rushed and not really detailed.
11. The first sentence is meh, like Bre said, try to grab the reader's attention!

I'd really like you to fix these mistakes, but overall, I do like the plotline and can't wait to read more!

XD IM just really bad with grammar . I fixed it =,too.Thanks for the help :)

Yeah...I'll agree with the terrible grammar statement. My mom's an English major.

Im using firefox.but i just dont trust the spellchecker.

You're still switching tenses through ought the story.