Bri
An Okay Side Effect
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Join date : 2011-05-14
Age : 25
Location : dystopia babey
 |  Subject: YOU THINK OF THE TITLE  Wed Nov 16, 2011 5:46 pm | |
| Well, in my Creative Writing class, the teacher gives us a picture, music, or both to start a short story or poem for warm-ups. Here's one of mine. If it sounds suicidal, tell me. A lot of people say it sounds suicidal A beautiful prison,
Nothing more, nothing less
Look out, you long for the open sea,
Just outside, enticing you
Same faces,
Same greetings,
Same things-
Monotonous
A beautiful jailbird,
Powdery white
A maiden who catches hearts
Only to unknowingly crush them underfoot
Silent
Morose
And a deadly beauty-
Dying
Another suitor,
An unknown doctor,
Cast his heart and eyes astray,
Only to let them set on Charlotte
Tall
Confident,
Suicidal
The end of two lives
An entrapping wonder,
A deadly beauty,
A savior
Three things,
All forgotten
By society
By love
Lost to the winds to cry in pain
Note: I don't really know what it''s about, but the god Apollo once said: "The meaning is only clear through the search"Leave comments, and please suggest a title! ~Blythe | |
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Booyahhayoob
Posts : 302
Join date : 2011-12-03
Age : 26
| | Subject: Re: YOU THINK OF THE TITLE Sat Dec 17, 2011 7:05 pm | |
| Why not to break the law? | |
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Bri
An Okay Side Effect
Posts : 1381
Join date : 2011-05-14
Age : 25
Location : dystopia babey
| | Subject: Re: YOU THINK OF THE TITLE Sat Dec 17, 2011 8:04 pm | |
| Er...Why? That doesn't really seem relevant to my poem... | |
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Booyahhayoob
Posts : 302
Join date : 2011-12-03
Age : 26
| | Subject: Re: YOU THINK OF THE TITLE Mon Dec 19, 2011 3:26 pm | |
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Bri
An Okay Side Effect
Posts : 1381
Join date : 2011-05-14
Age : 25
Location : dystopia babey
| | Subject: Re: YOU THINK OF THE TITLE Mon Dec 19, 2011 4:57 pm | |
| ...This isn't about a prison...It's metaphorically like a prison.... | |
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kenzie
Buttface
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Join date : 2011-12-01
Age : 25
Location : ontario
| | Subject: Re: YOU THINK OF THE TITLE Mon Dec 19, 2011 10:27 pm | |
| I like it,, what about if you called it Deadly Beauty | |
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