Ghost Hunter's Character...

Subject: Ghost Hunter's Character... Fri Apr 27, 2012 3:24 pm

Hi,
I never thought my username will be a example anyway down to character:
Half-Bloods
Name: First and Last Name : Ghost Hunter
Age/Birthday:26/11/2012 and 12 years old
Gender:Male
God Parent: Ares ( currently )
Claimed: Yes or No : No
Mortal Family: First and Last Name/s : Tenzin Tsokney
Years in Camp: First Year
Brief History: At least 4 sentences. Be sure to include details!
Ghost had been repetitively hunted down by monsters... He always wonder why nobody
can see them except him... Ghost was an ordinary kid till now when a satyr thing told
him to come with him... He brought him to a strange place called Camp Half Blood.
He had always like scary things...
Physical Appearance: Ghost have black eyes. He haves his hair combed daily and its
color was black... He wears an T-shirt and jeans.... He has and sword tightly wrapped amd
carefully hidden in his shirt... He likes long rubber-soled shoes... etc..,
Personality: At least 4 sentences. Be sure to include details!
Ghost haves a scar carefully hidden behind his eyebrows that was when he had fallen from
a stair... He always wears his two of his favorite T-shirts... He is always talking about something
one thing or another. He has an locket in shape of square which never takes off.
Fatal Flaw: No Pity for Monsters
Pets: Hell-hound
Talents: Good at sword fighting.
Weapons: Sword and Shield
Year-Round or Summer: Year-round
Other:Nope

Subject: Re: Ghost Hunter's Character... Fri Apr 27, 2012 3:33 pm

Er... The name was Hunter Ghost i typoed

Subject: Re: Ghost Hunter's Character... Fri Apr 27, 2012 6:19 pm

Hello Ghost Hunter! Welcome to CHB!

Hunter Ghost is a wonderful name. Although, you could have just edited your first post instead of having to make another reply. Also, his personality section seems to be more on physical appearance. Is he quiet, sad, or blunt-- please add information about his personality and more flaws. You wouldn't want a Gary-Stu.

His brief history section lacks detail. How did he get to camp? Where did he live prior to camp arrival? To add to that, please try not to use too much ellipses (e.g. [...]).

What do you mean when you say his god parent is Ares 'currently'? Is it what people believe? All unclaimed demigods stay in the minor gods cabin. Unless, of course, you can explain that 'currently' you mentioned.

No pity for monsters isn't exactly a fatal flaw. Maybe change it to something that can affect others as well, not just monsters.

What's his relationship with Tenzin Tsokney?

Other than the aforementioned suggestions/tips, Hunter's looking pretty okay! :)

Subject: Re: Ghost Hunter's Character... Sat Apr 28, 2012 5:26 am

I'm just going to add to what Pink said, also when making a character try and make the sentences connect, I'm just going to help you a bit here if you don't mind

Quote :: Ghost have black eyes. He haves his hair combed daily and its
color was black... He wears an T-shirt and jeans.... He has and sword tightly wrapped amd
carefully hidden in his shirt... He likes long rubber-soled shoes... etc..,

to:

Quote :: Ghost has bottomless black eyes. His hard is combed daily and contrasts with his eyes, the two not much different in colour. He likes to wear T-shirts and jeans. Under his shirt he keeps his sword tightly wrapped to himself. Ghost mostly wears rubber-soled shoes since he finds them most comfortable when wearing all day.

Subject: Re: Ghost Hunter's Character... Sun Apr 29, 2012 5:36 am

Dean I don't mind you helping me... I am just new to role-playing by posting. I always used to role play in sites which haves games and things. And can you help me create my character?

Subject: Re: Ghost Hunter's Character... Sun Apr 29, 2012 12:03 pm

You just have to do what Dean showed you how to do. Here's a hint; USE ADJECTIVES in physical appearance and personality

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