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Jamjam
Posts : 263 Join date : 2011-12-18 Age : 30 Location : USA
| Subject: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Sun Dec 18, 2011 4:26 pm | |
| Name: Iekka Monroe (pronounced (eye-kah) Age/Birthday: 18/ July 19, 1993 Gender: Female God Parent: Demeter Claimed: Yes Mortal Family: Jonah Monroe (deceased); Lisa Monroe (step-mom); Leeva and Maxium Monroe (mortal half-siblings) Years in Camp: 13 Brief History: Iekka was born in Edinburgh, Scotland to Jonah Monroe, an aspiring novelist. At age 4, she was moved to America with her father to Rhode Island. Iekka was born to a Scottish father, who was a novelist, in Edinburgh, Scotland--ironically born in spring, when everything bloomed. Her mother was a woman who highly called herself "Demeter". After a few months, she left Jonah (Iekka's father) and Iekka in Scotland. Heartbroken, Jonah emigrated to America in hopes to forget Demeter. Jonah was only able to live with Iekka until she was 5 years old in Rhode Island. Even though just a child, Iekka was still a demigod, and monsters chased her and her father everywhere. Jonah rushed Iekka to Long Island by a ferry then by car already having been informed of Camp Half-Blood. Monsters disguised themselves on the ferry then chased the car. At Half-Blood Hill, Jonah carried her up and pushed her over the barrier. Just then, a monster grabbed his feet and started pulling him down. Iekka watched in horror as the monsters tore him apart, sobbing for Iekka to turn. As Jonah died, Iekka was picked up and carried down the other side of the hill by an unknown person. She kicked and thrashed until she just closed her eyes. Physical Appearance: Iekka is of average height for her age and is athletic. Her dark hair is parted on the left and is layered. She has high cheekbones, naturally arched eyebrows, and her facial features are generally beautiful. She has a Cupid's Bow (lips) that are thin. Personality: Is friendly with everyone, even the people who don't like her. After having a bad childhood, Iekka wants to be as positive as possible. Being at Camp Half-Blood for thirteen years turned her around. She became happier and more positive. Her step-mother, Lisa, sends her letters every two weeks, as she has now grown closer to Iekka. Iekka has gotten to know people similar to herself from the other cabins, including her half-siblings. Fatal Flaw: Too self-confident in herself. Pets: N/A Talents: Can control the flora. Weapons: [All disguised] A green ring with a flower in the middle. When the flower is tapped, it becomes a Celestial sword. She has a green charm bracelet on her right wrist that can become a shield when tapped. Year-Round or Summer: Year-round Other:
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Beanie If you can't have Scott McCall, why bother?
Posts : 2101 Join date : 2011-06-12 Age : 24 Location : eternally stuck in Hades
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Sun Dec 18, 2011 5:50 pm | |
| Please follow the basic format listed in rules and guidlines. You can expand from that | |
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moon Elite Writer
Posts : 5597 Join date : 2011-02-16 Age : 26 Location : lost in the woods
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Sun Dec 18, 2011 6:18 pm | |
| Bean, Now now. I think this is a nice way to express a lot of different parts of her character. It's not our format, but it is a nice format. I would keep it unless and Admin has a problem with it. | |
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Jamjam
Posts : 263 Join date : 2011-12-18 Age : 30 Location : USA
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Sun Dec 18, 2011 7:05 pm | |
| Oh, sorry. I was looking at a few other submissions, to see how it should've been done; to see if we could change it. So I just copied those ones. :/ Does that mean I should change it, or wait and see if another Admin says its okay? :( Sorry. | |
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kenzie Buttface
Posts : 1813 Join date : 2011-12-01 Age : 25 Location : ontario
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Sun Dec 18, 2011 7:16 pm | |
| Personally, I absolutly love this character! Tell me when it get's accepted and we can Rp!! (: | |
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Jamjam
Posts : 263 Join date : 2011-12-18 Age : 30 Location : USA
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Sun Dec 18, 2011 7:25 pm | |
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kenzie Buttface
Posts : 1813 Join date : 2011-12-01 Age : 25 Location : ontario
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Sun Dec 18, 2011 7:29 pm | |
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Jamjam
Posts : 263 Join date : 2011-12-18 Age : 30 Location : USA
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Sun Dec 18, 2011 8:31 pm | |
| Okay, I used the original basic template. The "Brief History" is continued in "Other". Its kind of long. (: | |
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kenzie Buttface
Posts : 1813 Join date : 2011-12-01 Age : 25 Location : ontario
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Sun Dec 18, 2011 8:47 pm | |
| The character is awesome, just send an Admin or Mod a PM asking them to accept your charries and they'll look into it (: | |
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Skye THE YODELMEISTER
Posts : 3654 Join date : 2011-06-25 Age : 28 Location : The Stratosphere
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Sun Dec 18, 2011 9:02 pm | |
| Instead of referring to the Other Section for the History, can you just move it back to where it should go, please? Can you giver her Personality two more sentences? Can you also remove one of her swords? She seems a little powerful with two. And can you specify what kind of metal the first sword is? Celestial Bronze or Iron? Once you fix those things, I can accept her. o w o | |
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Jamjam
Posts : 263 Join date : 2011-12-18 Age : 30 Location : USA
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Sun Dec 18, 2011 10:19 pm | |
| I fixed the them. The history is kind of long; I don't know how else to shorten it without leaving out too much info! :/ | |
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kenzie Buttface
Posts : 1813 Join date : 2011-12-01 Age : 25 Location : ontario
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Sun Dec 18, 2011 10:21 pm | |
| You don't need to shorten the history, the longer the better :) | |
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Jamjam
Posts : 263 Join date : 2011-12-18 Age : 30 Location : USA
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Sun Dec 18, 2011 10:26 pm | |
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Skye THE YODELMEISTER
Posts : 3654 Join date : 2011-06-25 Age : 28 Location : The Stratosphere
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Sun Dec 18, 2011 10:44 pm | |
| You don't need to shorten the history. I'm just asking you to move all of it to the history section. (It doesn't have to be only 4 sentences. That's only the minimum.)
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Jamjam
Posts : 263 Join date : 2011-12-18 Age : 30 Location : USA
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Sun Dec 18, 2011 11:59 pm | |
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Beanie If you can't have Scott McCall, why bother?
Posts : 2101 Join date : 2011-06-12 Age : 24 Location : eternally stuck in Hades
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Mon Dec 19, 2011 8:30 am | |
| Yeah, when I was skimming through it I didn't seea fatal flaw, but I didn't read closely. Where did you get this format? Another new user also used it. | |
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Jamjam
Posts : 263 Join date : 2011-12-18 Age : 30 Location : USA
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Tue Dec 20, 2011 6:08 pm | |
| Yeah, I didn't see the actual character format first. :P I just thought we could make one that had the key points. I got it from one of the older ones. I don't quite remember the name. Another character if possible: Name: Kana-Minh Wu Age/Birthday: 14/ November 17, 1997 Gender: Female God Parent: Nike, goddess of victories Claimed: No Mortal Family: Xian Lam Wu; half-sister of Aiko Kiyomizu Wu. Years in Camp: 8 Physical Appearance: Generally Asian; she has thin pale colored lips, and a very petite, yet proportionate body. Black, wavy hair falls down her back and a few inches past her shoulders. Her eyes are small almond shaped eyes, with hazel irises. In general, Kana is short but very quick. Personality: She is somewhat stuck up. Hard to get off your trail and won't back down from anything. She is a hard worker either way and is extremely driven to win. On a regular basis, anything less than second best is a disappointment to herself. She never wants to fail and never wants to be the one listening to the boasting. Brief History: Kana-Minh, or simply Kana, was born to a Vietnamese father and the Greek goddess Nike in NYC, USA. At age 6 while at school, Mr. Wu was tortured by dracanae into giving Kana's whereabouts, and after he refused, was never seen again. Finding out about this, Kana ran to Long Island, knowing of Camp Half-Blood after Mr. Wu had told her. Being just 6, it was remarkable that she made the long distance. As of now, Kana-Minh has been at camp 8 years. Fatal Flaw: Gloating. Since her mother is Nike, goddess of victory, she calls herself highly among others, which can get her into trouble. Pets: None Talents: Winning all the time; it is very unlikely she will lose any battle. She's very well trained in wielding her staff. Weapons: A long staff with two pointed ends. It is made out of celestial bronze.
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Angel The Puppet Master
Posts : 4752 Join date : 2010-07-10 Age : 30 Location : in zans belly huhuh
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Tue Dec 20, 2011 8:56 pm | |
| It seems that you're missing Physical Appearance and Personality. Please add those two things with at least four sentences each. | |
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Jamjam
Posts : 263 Join date : 2011-12-18 Age : 30 Location : USA
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Tue Dec 20, 2011 11:09 pm | |
| Fixed! Might add more later. I'm loaded with ideas! ^_^
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Angel The Puppet Master
Posts : 4752 Join date : 2010-07-10 Age : 30 Location : in zans belly huhuh
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Wed Dec 21, 2011 12:20 am | |
| She needs one more sentence in her personality. And would you mind putting her father's first and last name under "Mortal Family", even if he's deceased. | |
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Jamjam
Posts : 263 Join date : 2011-12-18 Age : 30 Location : USA
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Wed Dec 21, 2011 12:30 am | |
| All done. Anything else I missed? =] | |
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Angel The Puppet Master
Posts : 4752 Join date : 2010-07-10 Age : 30 Location : in zans belly huhuh
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Wed Dec 21, 2011 7:27 am | |
| Nope. ^^ Looks great! Thanks for editing.
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Jamjam
Posts : 263 Join date : 2011-12-18 Age : 30 Location : USA
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Wed Dec 21, 2011 3:20 pm | |
| Thank you! I have more...hehehe. I'm on a roll: Name: Aiko Kiyomizu Wu Age/Birthday: 16/ May 4, 1994 Gender: Female God Parent: Harmonia Claimed: Yes Mortal Family: Xian Lam Wu, Asahi (brother), half-sister of Kana-Minh Wu Years in Camp: 2 Physical Appearance: Generally Asian; She has auburn colored hair up to her shoulders which is stick straight. She an average height of around 5'7". Somewhat muscular, she is very proportionate. Her eyes are a dark green and her skin is very pale as well. She has clear skin that is slightly tanned. Personality: She always happy and smiling. Never is there a day that can make her feel bad. her mood is always bubbly and sweet and gentle. She also doesn't believe in battling. Brief History: Aiko was born to a loving farmer father in North Carolina, USA. As a baby, her father married another woman and had a son, Asahi. Though an oddball in her family, Aiko was the most unique. When her father disappeared when she was 13, Aiko ran away from NC and pursued Chiron, whom she had already known by letters, for help. Being a sort of "squatter" in around towns, Aiko traveled for 1 very slow year. Fatal Flaw: Any type of disruption to peace. It throws her off from any concentration and makes unaware of things. Pets: A small tabby cat with an unusual blue nose. Talents: Bringing peace and harmony. Weapons: A small Celestial bronze dagger, about 9" in length. Name: Nikkos Cities Age/Birthday: 12/ January 21, 1999 Gender: Male God Parent: Moros, god of fate Claimed: Yes Mortal Family: Roberta Cities; only child. Years in Camp: 0 Physical Appearance: He has shaggy brown hair that goes over his eyes. He is somewhat pale with darker spots on his limbs as well as many cuts and scabs. He is pretty tall, 5' 3" already. Although, Nikkos is very scrawny and fragile. [color=#003333Personality:[/color] Prefers to be quiet and say whatever is needed to be said. He won't burst out at unnecessary times. He won't give a person whatever they want. He is more solitary than social and prefers to walk around telling random things to the wrong people. Brief History: Born in orphanage, Nikkos has always been quiet. As a younger child, he would have small little dreams and visions. Nikkos would walk up to the person who would meet up with the person of whom he spoke of. This scared everyone he met. Eventually, Nikkos was moved from place to place, only to be shooed away. More than half of his life, Nikkos has been wandering, on and off, getting a temporary job. Only until getting to CHB has he felt loved. Fatal Flaw: Feeling too much pity and telling the fate when unnecessary. Pets: An aged Border Collie that has been traveling with him. Talents: Telling the fate of others, quickness, slyness. Weapons: A knife made of iron, only 5" long.
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Zan Mega Asshole Duo
Posts : 10035 Join date : 2010-05-04 Age : 27 Location : butthole PA
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Wed Dec 21, 2011 3:34 pm | |
| That's not a fatal flaw and her skin is green? :p | |
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Jamjam
Posts : 263 Join date : 2011-12-18 Age : 30 Location : USA
| Subject: Re: JamieJay's Character Submission [UNDER CONSTRUCTION] Wed Dec 21, 2011 3:51 pm | |
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