I need a little help

Subject: I need a little help Mon Dec 12, 2011 10:11 am

Ok so... I've been on for over a year now, and I know that I can be a bit of a slow learner. It just seems like people who've been on as long as I have (or sometimes even a lesser time) are making much better post. I realize it might just be me beaver personality, but I'm not happy with the quality of my post. I'm feeling a little... I don't know, maybe left behind? I just wish I was a better role-player. Is there any way to make my posts better better? I'm currently rping in first person.

Subject: Re: I need a little help Mon Dec 12, 2011 4:11 pm

Well, Libby, I find it a lot easyier to write in first person. If you want to make your posts longer, try to write what there thinking. Heres an example:

ElizaPrincess wrote:
I held Matthews hand. "Matthew...I...I think I'm in love with you." I told him. Oh, Gods, did I just say that? I felt my face blushing, as I released his hands and looked away.

Here is that same post, but heres what their thinking, too.

Eliza Princess wrote:
I held Matthews hands. They felt warm, and sweaty. "Um...Matthew? There is something that I have to tell you..." I gulped. I felt my face turn red, oh gods! Was I really doing this? There was no going back now. "I...I think I'm in love with you." I think? What was that?? I am in love with him. I had known Matthew sence we were kids. We were best friends, and I had loved him forever. "I, I mean I am in love with you!" I looked away, releasing his hands.

See the diffrence? Sometimes it's hard to write a long post, but the key is to not think about it. And, once your done typing it, try reading it before you hit 'send' so then you can know if theres something you want to add.

Hope this helps!

~Pip~

Subject: Re: I need a little help Mon Dec 12, 2011 4:19 pm

Thanks a lot pip. I'll try out those tips. THANK YOU!

Subject: Re: I need a little help Fri Dec 16, 2011 12:58 am

I feel that it doesn't really matter the length of the post, but more the quality. I find that writing in third person is easier to allow yourself to take on an omniscient view and you can describe better that way. In some cases first person is really awesome, but I usually use third person.

On thing that I do to add to my posts is to put in active verbs and lots of adjectives. Also, adding personification is a really great way to add detail and make it easier for your reader to visualize. For example:

Hannah walked into the room, proud with her work. She smiled and stuffing her hands in her pockets, she sat down on the edge of her bed.

OR

Hannah strutted into the room, puffing out her chest. She let her lopsided grin take over her face and her eyes danced with excitement. Hannah stuffed her hands into her tight jean pockets and dreamily perched herself on the edge of the quilt-covered bed.

Hope this helps!! And if it doesn't, don't worry about it. Sometimes posts don't come out the way you want them to and that is fine. It's also ok if your quality isn't where you would like it to be; it just gives you an opportunity for growth.