my characters (needs acceptance)

Subject: my characters (needs acceptance) Sun Nov 27, 2011 11:49 am

Brad Frost 10 male Apollo-camper brads mom Krystal 1year Yes has been claimed Brad was kicked out of school twice for trying to stab his monster teacher with a pen. Bully's picked on him for being different.His step-dad abandoned him and his mom when he was 5. Almost fell off the empire state building when he was 4. 4'5 brown hair brown eyes has a scar going over his right eye has tan skin Very shy and nervous Making fun of the Ares kids. cat Medicine,Archery,singing Bow,sword Year round

Subject: Re: my characters (needs acceptance) Sun Nov 27, 2011 11:55 am

Like I said before, the layout should look like this:

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Subject: Re: my characters (needs acceptance) Sun Nov 27, 2011 11:57 am

crisp told me to do that srry

Subject: Re: my characters (needs acceptance) Sun Nov 27, 2011 11:59 am

Crispy didn't tell you to do that. It's okay, you were just confused, most likely. Please only make one character topic.

Subject: Re: my characters (needs acceptance) Sun Nov 27, 2011 12:01 pm

Crispy Bacon wrote:: Name: For your first character, you would enter Brad Frost
Age/Birthday: How old is he? 10 years old? 13 years old? Also, when was he born? March 1st? November 24th?
Gender: You would enter Male for Brad
God Parent: Brad's god parent is Apollo
Claimed: Yes or No
Mortal Family: His mother's name, and other mortal family members (ex. aunt, mortal half-siblings, grandparents, etc.)
Years in Camp: How many years has he been at camp? 3 years? 1 year? Is he new?
Brief History: What happened in his past? Did his mother love him? How was he treated at school? What types of grades did he get? What types of things did he do?
Type at least 4 sentences. Be sure to include details!
Physical Appearance: What does Brad look like? How tall is he? 5'2"? 5'4"? Does he have blonde, black, brown, or red hair? What colours are his eyes? Blue, green, grey, black, brown? Is his skin tanned or pale? Does he have a lot of scars? Is he muscular or kind of scrawny? What types of clothes does he usually wear?
Also at least 4 sentences. Be sure to include details!
Personality: What type of person is Brad? Is he serious and silent? Shy and self-conscious? Brave and reckless? Does he trust others easily or does it take a lot to gain his trust? Does he make friends easily? Is he outgoing or does he keep to himself? Is he an independent type of person or does he tend to depend on others to do things for him?
The last section with at least 4 sentences. Be sure to include both good traits and flaws!
Fatal Flaw: This is his biggest flaw that might someday get him killed. It could be stubborness, recklessness, hubris, personal loyalty, anything (except for phobias).
Pets: Does he have a cat or dog? Possibly another type of animal?
Talents: What kinds of things is he good at? Archery, medicine, and singing and usual talents of children of Apollo.
Weapons: I'm assuming that he'll use a bow and arrow most of the time.
Year-Round or Summer: Does he stay at camp all year or does he only stay for summers?
Other: Any other information you would like to include about Brad.

Please leave the things that say "Name" or "Age/Birthday," etc. in and just replace the text that I have written with the information that you have typed up. Also, please include four sentences for history, appearance, and personality.

Subject: Re: my characters (needs acceptance) Sun Nov 27, 2011 12:46 pm

Name: Brad Frost
Age/Birthday: 10 9-28-01
Gender: Male
God parent: Apollo
Mortal family: Mother- Krystal Frost
Years in Camp: 1 year (This will be Brad's first year in camp.)
Claimed: Yes has been claimed
Brief History: Brad was kicked out of school twice for trying to stab his monster teacher with a pen. In the past, bullies have picked on Brad for being different. Brad's step-dad abandoned him and his mom when he was 5 years old. Brad almost fell off the Empire State Building when he was 4 years old.
Physical Appearance: Brad is 4 feet and 5 inches tall. He has brown hair and brown eyes. He also has tanned skin and a lean, muscular build. Brad has a scar going over his right eye.
Personality: Brad is a nervous and shy kid. Brad is more shy and awkward around pretty girls. Brad sings to make himself happy. Brad believes that training is pointless. Brad enjoys learning and expanding his knowledge of weaponry and their uses.
Fatal Flaw: Brad is very impatient and sometimes reckless while fighting monsters.
Pets: Brad had an orange tabby cat, named Artemis.
Talents: Brads talents lie in the fields of medicine, archery, musical arts and Brad has a photographic memory.
Weapons: Brad's choice of weaponry is the bow and sword. Brad also carries dual desert eagle pistols.
Year round or summer: Brad attends camp on a year round basis.
other: Brad has a twin brother that he does not know about.

Subject: Re: my characters (needs acceptance) Sun Nov 27, 2011 12:48 pm

Try to be a little more descriptive for the personality. Try to describe more things about his behaviour not what he likes/dislikes. Also, loving the fight monsters isn't really a fatal flaw. You could change it to "Reckless when fighting monsters" or something along those lines.

Subject: Re: my characters (needs acceptance) Fri Dec 02, 2011 7:05 pm

Try to use full sentences when writing. (: Also, be a little more descriptive with his personality. Is he shy when meeting new people? Is he outgoing and friendly? Is he secluded and secretive, or open?

Fix those things, and maybe I can accept him! :3

Subject: Re: my characters (needs acceptance) Sat Dec 10, 2011 11:50 am

As Skye said, I could not accept him. Please, please use complete sentences. Thanks.

Subject: Re: my characters (needs acceptance) Fri Dec 16, 2011 6:29 pm

Brad Frost is Accepted! Thank you for being so patient and editing it when asked!

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