Okay, I'm not a mod, which is probably clear, but I have a few suggestions. First, he needs one more sentence for his physical appearance and two for his personality. Second of all, the "Fatal Flaw" is something that could lead to your character's death, not something that could kill someone. Either way, it's an irrelevant power considering his father is Ares. Finally, you can't have a magical pet for your character unless you purchase it with your 'drachma' which you will earn through posting. I apologize if I appear rude or a know-it-all, I'm just trying to help. Anyways, welcome to camp half-blood and I hope you enjoy the site!