YOU THINK OF THE TITLE

Subject: YOU THINK OF THE TITLE Wed Nov 16, 2011 5:46 pm

Well, in my Creative Writing class, the teacher gives us a picture, music, or both to start a short story or poem for warm-ups. Here's one of mine. If it sounds suicidal, tell me. A lot of people say it sounds suicidal

A beautiful prison,
Nothing more, nothing less
Look out, you long for the open sea,
Just outside, enticing you
Same faces,
Same greetings,
Same things-
Monotonous

A beautiful jailbird,
Powdery white
A maiden who catches hearts
Only to unknowingly crush them underfoot
Silent
Morose
And a deadly beauty-
Dying

Another suitor,
An unknown doctor,
Cast his heart and eyes astray,
Only to let them set on Charlotte
Tall
Confident,
Suicidal
The end of two lives

An entrapping wonder,
A deadly beauty,
A savior
Three things,
All forgotten
By society
By love
Lost to the winds to cry in pain

Note: I don't really know what it''s about, but the god Apollo once said:
"The meaning is only clear through the search"
Leave comments, and please suggest a title!
~Blythe

Posts : 302 Join date : 2011-12-03 Age : 25

Why not to break the law?

Subject: Re: YOU THINK OF THE TITLE Sat Dec 17, 2011 8:04 pm

Er...Why? That doesn't really seem relevant to my poem...

Posts : 302 Join date : 2011-12-03 Age : 25

ALCATRAZ

Subject: Re: YOU THINK OF THE TITLE Mon Dec 19, 2011 4:57 pm

...This isn't about a prison...It's metaphorically like a prison....

Subject: Re: YOU THINK OF THE TITLE Mon Dec 19, 2011 10:27 pm

I like it,, what about if you called it Deadly Beauty