Lana Erickson's Characters

Subject: Lana Erickson's Characters Sun Nov 13, 2011 2:21 am

Name:
Lana Sophia Erickson
Gender:
Female
Age:
Seventeen years of age.
Birthday:
Born on July 10, 1994
Godly Parent:
Aceso
Mortal Parent:
Michael Erickson.
Years at Camp:
This is Lana's first year, but her has been trying to get her to come for about four years.
Until recently Lana didn't believe him, but some creature attacked her a few weeks ago and she finally agreed.
Brief History:
Ever since Lana was five years old she knew she was different. She had friends, and she had boys chasing after her, but she always felt like she didn't belong. As she got older she became more determined to find her mother. Lana's father tried to stop her, but she didn't listen. The search dragged on for years. Than, one day a hideous creature attacked Lana, that's when her father decided it was time to send her to Camp.
Physical Appearance:
Lana stands out in a crowd, with her tan skin, long blonde hair, and dark gray-ish brown eyes. She has lean muscular legs, earned from years of dancing. Lana's hair has random sprouts of color making her even more noticeable in any crowd.
Pets:
Lana has a small white and brown hamster named Skittles.
Weapons:
Lana doesn't enjoy fighting, and she never carries any weapons around with her. The only thing she has ever carried around with her is mace, and her attitude.
Talents:
Lana is an amazing singer, but she doesn't believe this to be true so she rarely ever sings in public. Lana is also a very graceful dancer, and has been dancing for several years now.
Fatal Flaw
Leah's fatal flaw is her determination. It may not sound that fatal at first, but when she wants something, she will do anything to get it. Although, she would never purposely harm another human, if they stand in her way, she might end up doing so.
Personality:
She is a very intelligent, nice, sweet, and outgoing girl. And she isn't afraid to make a statement. People often categorize her as odd because she says quirky things, that come off as a bit strange. Lana don't mind being alone, but it's not her favorite thing to be. She carefully picks her friends, which could annoy some people. Lana doesn't have a huge temper, it takes a lot to tick her off, and when she is mad, she always runs off, so nobody has to get hurt.

Guest

First of all, I'd like to commend you for coming up with an interesting character. I especially like the detail included in the Brief History section. However, there are a few things I'd like to add:

A) Personality
I see that you've added a bit of her personality on the Physical Appearance section. Kindly separate them and expound on what she's like. Is she hot-tempered? Does she prefer to keep away from groups and posses?

B) Flaws
Lana needs a Fatal Flaw and a few more flaws here and there (unless, of course, she isn't human). For example, is she violent and impulsive? Is she too lax to care? Add flaws to her personality and make sure her fatal flaw is something rather grave.

Other than the previous statements mentioned, it's a great start! Keep it up!

Subject: Re: Lana Erickson's Characters Sun Nov 13, 2011 10:52 am

Thanks so much! That means a lot! I fixed it, is it better now?

Posts : 121 Join date : 2011-11-02 Age : 34

Erm.... Alceme was not a goddess she was the mortal mother of Heracles.

Subject: Re: Lana Erickson's Characters Sun Nov 13, 2011 3:35 pm

Kyrian is correct. :3 Please try and find an actual godly parent. I suggest using this page to assist you in finding a Greek deity that you'd like to use!
Also, I don't see a Personality section in your info...Please add one with at least four sentences! ^^

Subject: Re: Lana Erickson's Characters Sun Nov 13, 2011 4:54 pm

Ooops.. ! & my personality section is in the other part .

Subject: Re: Lana Erickson's Characters Sun Nov 13, 2011 6:56 pm

She's accepted. ^^ However, I do ask that you take the personality out from under "Other" and make it its own "Personality" section.
Great character! And welcome to Camp Half-Blood!

Subject: Re: Lana Erickson's Characters Sun Nov 13, 2011 7:06 pm

Thank you:)