VladmirMotov's Character ( approval needed )

Posts : 11 Join date : 2011-01-24 Age : 27

Name: Steve Jolian
Age/Birthday: 15 July 7
Gender: Male
God Parent: Ares
Mortal Parent: Mary Jolian
Years in Camp: none
Brief History: Steve was born in a complete ghetto city. He was very poor and learned to survive on the streets with his mom. He has a job at Wal-Mart which is the only source of money besides robbing people. He also has a brother, Goliath that causes him to be sent to Juvenal Hall because his brother plants drugs on him and gets into fist fights with him. One time him and his brother got into such a fight that they drew blood on each other and the cops had to seperate them. Him and his brother have then fought so much after that untill they swore not to contact each other again and Goliath ran away.Then at the age 12 his mother got murdered and his grandfather told him about Camp Half-Blood. Then he spent 16 days finding his way to the gates of Camp Half-Blood.
Physical Appearance: Long, shaggy black hair, and Black shades to hide his red eyes.He also wears baggy worn jeans with a leather jacket coating his orange Camp Half-Blood shirt. Down lower he wears Nike shoes with floppy soles and ruined laces. Finally on his right arm he has a long scar he got from a hobo with a switch blade knife.
Personality: Steve could be a very friendly person if you get on his good side. He has AD-HD and anger issues, he doesnt like snobs and jerks. Steve is mostly silent and doesnt bother anybody that much. But due to Steve's painful past he has mood swings at moments and can be offended very easily.
Pets:none
Talents: Fighting, stealing,playing basket ball, garbage picking, Sword fixing, sword sharpening and shining, pretty much attending to weapons, and running ( but not from battles )
Weapons: a small rusted dagger passed down from his family

Nice character! I like him. Are you a Vampire Academy fan?

Posts : 11 Join date : 2011-01-24 Age : 27

kind of

I don't even understand why all Ares children have to have red eyes...I mean...gosh.

Really good, for a first character. Commonly you see new members with characters with short sentences and bad grammar. Your character has just what we're looking for on here-- some flaws, a good description, etc. Welcome to the site, and I look forward to role-playing with you sometime! :]

Agreed with Wish. I can't wait to start roleplaying with you! (:

Posts : 11 Join date : 2011-01-24 Age : 27

how does this get approved?? PS TOUCH MY EGG!!!

Clicked your egg! :]
The admins have a lot to do, plus, we only have 2 of them, so it might take a while for them to check your character. Sorry ]:

Posts : 11 Join date : 2011-01-24 Age : 27

ok thanks

Hey, I am not a mod or admin so I can't approve it, but I would like to give you some advice so it can be approved.

1. Please explain your bio more. If he is 13, he can not have a job. The youngest you can be is 15 to have a job.

2. Who is his brother? Rehab can be months to a year long. Even if he was found with drugs, they might not send him there. Your character might be sent to Juvenal hall for using or selling drugs or even to an adoption agency for parental neglect.

3. Your character probably has more talents than fighting and stealing. What else is he good at?

4. I like the description of your character. It is very detailed.

I would suggest touching up a bit more on your character's talents and maybe elaborate more on the big brother. Once that's all patched up, Emily or I will accept it. (:

Posts : 11 Join date : 2011-01-24 Age : 27

I went added a few hobbies and i added some details about the brother

It's better. Although you could elaborate on his skill with his talents (okay, pretty good, exceptional.)

Guest

Sorry about the wait! Accepted.