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|Subject: jeromeof6's campers Sun May 06, 2012 10:14 pm|| |
Name: joshua faraday
Age/Birthday: 14, 5/20
God Parent: hephastus
Mortal Family: teresa faraday. desmond faraday
Years in Camp:1
Brief History: hephastus was very happy to accept and claim his son at his birth. not surprisingly josh was extremely fast. his father desmond was a scientist. this gave josh a very good knowledge. occasionaly hephastus even came to visit the young boy. josh loved both of his parents and lived in a good society.
Physical Appearance: josh is about five foot ten and he has medium sized brunnete hair. his eyes are blue and he is white. hermes has told him that he has an award winning smile. he has a lanky body type.
Personality:josh is a very caring and friendly person. he is not the one to refuse a good fight though. he is very much of a people person. he has proven to be a little conceited at times though.
Fatal Flaw:he can be conceited and he is not that strong.
Talents:extremely fast, smart
Weapons:his mind. dual wield sword
Year-Round or Summer:1
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|Subject: Re: jeromeof6's campers Sat May 19, 2012 12:31 pm|| |
Gods don't have any contact with their children. Just saying. Other than that he looks good.
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|Subject: Re: jeromeof6's campers Sat May 19, 2012 6:52 pm|| |
Welcome to CHB, jeromeof6!
While I admire you for making a child of Hephaestus (I can't bring myself into creating one), there are just a few things I'd like to point out-- tips, if you will. First of all, please forgive my bluntness when I say this, it's important that you follow proper grammar. Meaning you must capitalize your letters and fix your sentence structure. Next, 'extremely fast' does need some elaboration since I believe it is more of a Hermes camper trait. Hephaestus children tend to develop skills in forging, crafting, and minimal fire control (not sure about the minimal part, though). Also, what do you mean his weapon is 'his mind'? Do you mean he's cunning and good at strategy? These seem more like Athena and Hermes traits, but I guess if you explain what you mean by 'his mind', then I can help you more. Lastly, what do you mean by 'he's not that strong'? Physically strong? Emotionally strong?
Other than the aforementioned, pretty well done! :)
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